1. I feel like the language of the scene is what really pulls it together. Exton is unsure and Rand is very relaxed. He seems to embody the king and really has the social skills... something that Camillo lacked. He exhibited the openness that comes with being a king yet he was kind... something you don't always see. I also feel like I was able to show how Exton became gradually more content with the situation and how he began to relax after meeting the king in an overwhelming place. I also felt like it was a good scene to show Exton's first impression of Celphi. Celphi's personality was perfect too. She barely said anything and I used Rand to explain who she is. I felt like it kept her mysterious but still shed enough light on her to not make her seem unattainable.
2. A weakness might be the multiple monologues that Rand went through telling his life. I'm not sure how that would show up on screen. He talked for quite a while. I think it would work well for a book though. I think I could have made Exton look a bit more nervous too. He seemed to get over it a little fast now that I look at it again. Also, I might want to include more about Celphi. Maybe I should have her talk at the meeting before she leaves the meeting. Maybe I should have her be talking about some important things that involve her being a strong warrior type archetype.
3. I would fix all things in the previous section. Celphi would definitely have to be portrayed as being a more severe person. Also, Rand's story of himself could be better. I want to give him more personality. He said something about being a hard ass but I feel like it could keep going. I want him to be a more fun, ball-busting, type person that is completely contradictory and opposite to Celphi's personality.
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