Tuesday, June 12, 2012
Blog 13
When we first discussed this, I though it was the dumbest idea ever. I was dreading it because I didn't want to have to write that much... especially in high school with all of my tests coming up and because it was senior year. I actually felt kind of mad. I rerally didn't want to do it. I was actually satisfied with the project though by the end of it. I feel as though I really let my creativity fly and it has made me feel quite accomplished. So, I liked it. I felt that the outline was the most important thing from the script frenzy workbook. It made it easy to write the script because my words could just flow and I didn't have to worry about what was next. I don't really believe any of the pages weren't helpful but I do think that it got a bit repetitive at some points. There were some areas where I had to explain my characters like five times. I learned that I am a huge perfectionist from doing this project. It was hard for me to write a lot because I kept focusing on developing everything and it slowed me down. By the end, I was able to let it all go and right many pages in just a few days but the first 25 days or so, I only wrote like 25 pages. The last five days I wrote another 28 pages. I finished with 53 pages. I was horrible at the time management at first but it developed later on and I got better with it. By the end, I just focused on getting words down and it was much easier. I didn't even py attention to spelling by the end. It was a pain to let that go at the beginning. I'm glad I learned how to let it go though. It can be very helpful sometimes. My script is very well planned out and has so much potential so I feel that that is a very strong point. I'm very proud of my fight scene in Elkhorn and my careful planning. I feel as though this could be such a good story. My script has many weaknesses. For one, I never explained what happened to the old woman. Also, I could create a better relationship with the old man and Exton and develop Exton's personality better. Also, it still has no ending! If we had more time, I'd focus on getting the whole story down. Once that is done, I'd revise it for more intricate planning so that the story has ins and outs. But, first thing is first. I've gotta get my story down.
Friday, June 8, 2012
Blog 12
1. I feel like the language of the scene is what really pulls it together. Exton is unsure and Rand is very relaxed. He seems to embody the king and really has the social skills... something that Camillo lacked. He exhibited the openness that comes with being a king yet he was kind... something you don't always see. I also feel like I was able to show how Exton became gradually more content with the situation and how he began to relax after meeting the king in an overwhelming place. I also felt like it was a good scene to show Exton's first impression of Celphi. Celphi's personality was perfect too. She barely said anything and I used Rand to explain who she is. I felt like it kept her mysterious but still shed enough light on her to not make her seem unattainable.
2. A weakness might be the multiple monologues that Rand went through telling his life. I'm not sure how that would show up on screen. He talked for quite a while. I think it would work well for a book though. I think I could have made Exton look a bit more nervous too. He seemed to get over it a little fast now that I look at it again. Also, I might want to include more about Celphi. Maybe I should have her talk at the meeting before she leaves the meeting. Maybe I should have her be talking about some important things that involve her being a strong warrior type archetype.
3. I would fix all things in the previous section. Celphi would definitely have to be portrayed as being a more severe person. Also, Rand's story of himself could be better. I want to give him more personality. He said something about being a hard ass but I feel like it could keep going. I want him to be a more fun, ball-busting, type person that is completely contradictory and opposite to Celphi's personality.
Wednesday, April 25, 2012
Blog #11
INT. In a dream space. Not day or night
EXTON finds himself in a dream place. It is dark with twirling colors all about and no walls or floor can be seen. It is a vast void with only CAMILLO standing there in front of him.
EXTON
Who are you? I've seen you before. Throughout my life I've had little dreams where you have appeared. This feels so real though. Why...
EXTON will be holding his head and using his hand as to look confused.
CAMILLO
My name is Camillo. This is the Akashic Record. I will explain everything at another time but for now I will only explain a few things. Firstly, you are the next generation. You are a "prodigy" and by now, you've probably figured this out...
EXTON
So, what the old man said I did was true?
CAMILLO
Yes. When the time comes, I will help you understand these powers but for now, you must keep yourself quiet.
EXTON
Wait, I still don't know who you are though. How are you able to do this and wh... what is... is...
CAMILLO
I am a friend. Time will reveal everything. Goodbye Exton.
CAMILLO will turn away and fade.
CAMILLO will turn away and fade.
1. Takes place in a dream.
2. Non applicable. It's a dream.
3. They are discussing what happened to move the story along and to explain a bit of what is happenning. The room will be completely blank, like a dream in nowhere land.
Tuesday, April 24, 2012
Blog #10
EXTON
What is happening, old man?
OLD MAN
Exton, run! Get as far away as possible! The soldiers are here and they are ruining everything?
EXTON
Well, what are you doing then? Come with me.
OLD MAN
No, I must defend my land and my village. If I don't see you, remember that our life is based upon our people. Defend yourself and more importantly, your family and friends. They become your life. Grow up and be the man I know you can be. Now run!
(Exton begins to run away but as he looks back, he sees the old man fighting with a soldier. The soldier stabs the old man. Exton turns and runs at the soldier. Just as he did with the bear, he stabs the soldier with a bone protruding from the top of his hand)
EXTON
NO! Don't die! I need you.
OLD MAN
Exton, go now. You must leave me. I will be watching over you though. Goodbye.
(The old man dies)
(Exton gets up after a minute and begins toward the mountains)
Blog #9
EXTON
Who are you? I've seen you before. Throughout my life I've had little dreams where you have appeared. This feels so real though. Why...
CAMILLO
My name is Camillo. This is the Akashic Record. I will explain everything at another time but for now I will only explain a few things. Firstly, you are the next generation. You are a "prodigy" and by now, you've probably figured this out...
EXTON
So, what ___said I did was true?
CAMILLO
Yes. When the time comes, I will help you understand these powers but for now, you must keep yourself quiet.
EXTON
Wait, I still don't know who you are though. How are you able to do this and wh... what is... is...
CAMILLO
I am a friend. Time will reveal everything. Goodbye Exton.
Friday, April 20, 2012
Blog #8: Writing Effective Dialogue
1. Should be more dramatic and should move things along that will leave you breathless.
2. Mouth your dialogue. You'll start "real life editing" a dialogue. Take in everything.
3. Identify the character by what he or she says. They need their own self.
4. Putting together two very different people can work well. They will have a lot to say.
5. Encompasses what is said and also what is not said.
6. Sarcasm and impatience... give them an attitude.
7. You could model them after a different person. Don't base it on yourself.
8. Have them talk to everyone because you will see that their character will develop.
9. Trust yourself to listen to how that character will be.
10. Learn about people from people, not from your reading.
11. Feel it for the villain. Give him a heart even though it may be deranged.
2. Mouth your dialogue. You'll start "real life editing" a dialogue. Take in everything.
3. Identify the character by what he or she says. They need their own self.
4. Putting together two very different people can work well. They will have a lot to say.
5. Encompasses what is said and also what is not said.
6. Sarcasm and impatience... give them an attitude.
7. You could model them after a different person. Don't base it on yourself.
8. Have them talk to everyone because you will see that their character will develop.
9. Trust yourself to listen to how that character will be.
10. Learn about people from people, not from your reading.
11. Feel it for the villain. Give him a heart even though it may be deranged.
Wednesday, April 18, 2012
Blog #7
The opening scene:
It will start out with Exton being born in a confused scene in which his mother, who is an unknown person, will be yelling as an older man helps her give birth. The scene will quickly close with the old man holding the baby and the lady sleeping.
I want it to start with the mother screaming and it will only show the outside of a small cobblestone house. This will last for a few seconds and then the scene will transition to the woman's face screaming inside the house. She will be breathing heavily and then you will hear the old man's telling her to push. After a few more seconds, the baby's voice (Exton), will cry out. Immediately, the woman will cease any noise and you will see her body relax. Then it will switch to the old man. He will be a holding a small baby and he will be sloached over in a chair looking exhausted with sweat dripping all about. The music will be exhilirating but at the same time, quiet. At the last second, the man will say "Exton" and the scene will quickly go black.
Into the wide unknown:
Exton hears screaming and finds out that the Empire’s soldiers are attacking the village to scare them into surrender. He knew that they needed warriors and they were on the border of the separation of the Empire. Exton watches as the old man, who hates the empire, rebels. He gets stabbed and grief fills Exton. He runs up and kills the soldier as he did with the bear. He fleas into the surrounding trees and watches from upper land. He sees everyone either surrendering to save their land or rebel and die. Just then a hand touches his shoulder and Exton spins around to see the hooded figure. Camillo says they have to leave before something more happens. Exton, being young, attempts to ask a question but faints.
Exton will hear from inside the cobblestone house and run out. The old man will tell him to get back and run. Exton why plead and try to get him to surrender. The old man will explain to the soldier that he loves his land. He won't leave it and the people in it. He is sick of being oppressed and then the fighting will commence. The soldier will stab the old man before Exton gets to him but Exton will scream and kill the soldier as he did the bear. Then he will pick up the old man's head and the old man will tell him to leave and get away. He tells him to never give in to the evils of the Empire. He will then die and Exton will see soldiers approaching and Exton will run up into the woods and hide. He will have thoughts about what happened and begin to weigh out what to do but Camillo will arrive halfway through and touch him on the shoulder. Exton, recognizes him and tries to question him but faints. The screen will go black for a bit.
All is lost/Aha moment:
The three dragons fight with the riders on back. Exton will use a bone armor he can make and his bone weapons. They will thrash and eventually the fight will go to the ground. Before fighting, Kenji will explain how he was able to replicate cells in a piece of dragon bone left over from the war (because that is his power. He can replicate his own cells to stop disease, heal) to create a dragon. They then fight and Celphi gets injured. So Exton and Kenji merge and fight like no other. Then as they separate, their dragons come down and they take flight again. As they are in the air, something happens and Exton’s dragon flows over Kenji’s. Exton jumps off and pierces the dragon in the skull causing it to plummet. Exton creates a bone shield as he flies towards the ground. He hits and survives only to see Kenji still alive and his body morphing after the long fall as it heals. They will discuss ethics and morals and then fight again. Kenji will knock Exton down but he will shoot a bone out of his chest that sends Kenji through the air. It wasn’t enough to kill him though so he heals. Then when Exton tire out and can’t do anything more and he is on his knees, Celphi is rushed in as she hangs from Exton’s dragon’s feet and as she flies by, she decapitates Kenji. Exton sees Celphi tumble to the ground and he rushes to her side. He cradles her and she kisses him softly on the lips. His healing powers surge though Celphi so that she doesn’t die from the stunt she made. They talk with a little ra ra we did it.
When discussing morals and ethics, Kenji speaks with prominance. He explains his twisted view of everything. How keeping the world under oppression is the only way to keep it safe. He tries to support his ideas and say how it's better to kill off the prodigies or to keep them all under control. Exton will see his idea but find it absurd.
It will start out with Exton being born in a confused scene in which his mother, who is an unknown person, will be yelling as an older man helps her give birth. The scene will quickly close with the old man holding the baby and the lady sleeping.
I want it to start with the mother screaming and it will only show the outside of a small cobblestone house. This will last for a few seconds and then the scene will transition to the woman's face screaming inside the house. She will be breathing heavily and then you will hear the old man's telling her to push. After a few more seconds, the baby's voice (Exton), will cry out. Immediately, the woman will cease any noise and you will see her body relax. Then it will switch to the old man. He will be a holding a small baby and he will be sloached over in a chair looking exhausted with sweat dripping all about. The music will be exhilirating but at the same time, quiet. At the last second, the man will say "Exton" and the scene will quickly go black.
Into the wide unknown:
Exton hears screaming and finds out that the Empire’s soldiers are attacking the village to scare them into surrender. He knew that they needed warriors and they were on the border of the separation of the Empire. Exton watches as the old man, who hates the empire, rebels. He gets stabbed and grief fills Exton. He runs up and kills the soldier as he did with the bear. He fleas into the surrounding trees and watches from upper land. He sees everyone either surrendering to save their land or rebel and die. Just then a hand touches his shoulder and Exton spins around to see the hooded figure. Camillo says they have to leave before something more happens. Exton, being young, attempts to ask a question but faints.
Exton will hear from inside the cobblestone house and run out. The old man will tell him to get back and run. Exton why plead and try to get him to surrender. The old man will explain to the soldier that he loves his land. He won't leave it and the people in it. He is sick of being oppressed and then the fighting will commence. The soldier will stab the old man before Exton gets to him but Exton will scream and kill the soldier as he did the bear. Then he will pick up the old man's head and the old man will tell him to leave and get away. He tells him to never give in to the evils of the Empire. He will then die and Exton will see soldiers approaching and Exton will run up into the woods and hide. He will have thoughts about what happened and begin to weigh out what to do but Camillo will arrive halfway through and touch him on the shoulder. Exton, recognizes him and tries to question him but faints. The screen will go black for a bit.
All is lost/Aha moment:
The three dragons fight with the riders on back. Exton will use a bone armor he can make and his bone weapons. They will thrash and eventually the fight will go to the ground. Before fighting, Kenji will explain how he was able to replicate cells in a piece of dragon bone left over from the war (because that is his power. He can replicate his own cells to stop disease, heal) to create a dragon. They then fight and Celphi gets injured. So Exton and Kenji merge and fight like no other. Then as they separate, their dragons come down and they take flight again. As they are in the air, something happens and Exton’s dragon flows over Kenji’s. Exton jumps off and pierces the dragon in the skull causing it to plummet. Exton creates a bone shield as he flies towards the ground. He hits and survives only to see Kenji still alive and his body morphing after the long fall as it heals. They will discuss ethics and morals and then fight again. Kenji will knock Exton down but he will shoot a bone out of his chest that sends Kenji through the air. It wasn’t enough to kill him though so he heals. Then when Exton tire out and can’t do anything more and he is on his knees, Celphi is rushed in as she hangs from Exton’s dragon’s feet and as she flies by, she decapitates Kenji. Exton sees Celphi tumble to the ground and he rushes to her side. He cradles her and she kisses him softly on the lips. His healing powers surge though Celphi so that she doesn’t die from the stunt she made. They talk with a little ra ra we did it.
When discussing morals and ethics, Kenji speaks with prominance. He explains his twisted view of everything. How keeping the world under oppression is the only way to keep it safe. He tries to support his ideas and say how it's better to kill off the prodigies or to keep them all under control. Exton will see his idea but find it absurd.
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