Monday, April 2, 2012

Blog #5 Logline revised.

A young boy, Exton, is born into a poor farming family but his life changes when he discoveries he is the "prodigy" of his generation and must save the empire from oppression.

Changed to:

A young boy is born into a poor, self-reliant, farming family but his life changes when he discovers he is the "prodigy" of his generation, with abilities beyond mere man, and must save the Empire from oppression.

I took out his name and put more emphasis on the "prodigy" part by hinting at powers. I also put the "self-reliant" part in to help further develop his pre-adventure life.

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